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Frustrated hopeless silk tongue
Nail it too the floor
burn it
Tear it
Break it in for more

Screaming relentless anxiety
Pain showers of crimson plain
Aches
Pains
Cold November stain

And my breakfast is feasted on the stars
Morbid little dreams they were
And now I feel like I have nothing
But to count the days to forsake
This satin smooth sound
Such a whimsical hope for the forgotten mind
Pieces of this runaway introduction
Such an antique
To feel so weak as a ghost from the funeral bell

The ides of seasons come and go
Paint the sky black with clouds of thunder
Flashing blind winds of hurtful words
Screaming thunderclaps
Screaming shouts of hail
Swords poking through the outstretch of the mind
Such a wonderful passion in the awake
Hurtful
Portionate
Little words you tell me
A piece of the past ways

But in reality
It is only a slap in the face
To produce such drama
For the fading gun
For the fading dream
And everything goes boring
The noise between people are too great that some times, the message is never heard.
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relativelytarnished Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2005
I like this one as well.

Especially this line: "Cold November stain" It's very powerful, because it's familiar but you didn't say "rain", so it's recognition, but it's unique, a recipe for impact, at least in my mind.
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darktribute Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2005
thank you, you have an observing nature and it brings me joy to find someone who percieves this. :hug:
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Calliopie Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2005
damn your good!!! Augh..that poem discribes me when I'm sad in alot of ways. I LOVE IT!!!! Mr. Freaking Talented at the story/poetry shit and I'm so cool *struts around* yyeaaaahhh your lucky your cute or I'd throw my doughnut at you ;P
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darktribute Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2005
I might like that donut....;-;....I like donuts.....but yey, I'm glad you like it ^^
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Calliopie Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2005
Dooonnuutttzzz mmm powdery sugar goodness
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darktribute Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2005
hmmmm powdery sugary cinnabunnie donuts ^-____________________________-^
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acid-delilah Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
i love it
i love it all

i imagiry is really amazing and the whole thing os to dark and angry.

Its very sexy "silk tongue"
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darktribute Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2005
thank you, I am glad you love it ;3
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cailin-go-seoigh Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2005
It's so powerful! It's excellent! Well done!
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darktribute Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2005
Thank you very much. I am glad you like it. ^^
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